StoryWeaver13

Chapter One Please, tear this thing apart. I wrote it really fast, and even I'm not sure how I feel about it. :? The beautiful day almost seemed ironic. Mocking, ...

I like to write Action/Adventure novels, and sometimes other random stuff. Suh-weet! I'm totally into action/adventure, so if you write anything let me know and I'll look at it. Anyways, ...

Adorable ending, but I would've liked if this was just a little longer. I'm not a fan of romances, but this one was very sweet. Honestly, I don't have much ...

So far, so good, just remember to watch yourself for any typos (you have a few) and such. Other than that, I would've liked this to be just a little ...

This is great. At first glance it looked kind of intimidating because of how long the lines were, and I figured they were too long to work, but you did ...

This was really good, and it had a smooth flow to it. The only thing really is that you do a lot of telling, and even though you do a ...

“I’m getting too old for this,” Finn grumbled into the carpet as a Salvador’s tongue ran across his cheek. Davie chuckled from his place on the coffee table. “You’re not ...

I agree with the first reviewer on the fact that this sounds like a song. Also, impressive how much you know about this! I think this wealth of knowledge was ...

I just think you need to expand on this, and maybe help us sympathize with you a little more. Right now the tone is just kind of stern and direct ...

But I think you should give it a title, how would you feel if your parents left you nameless? I think you should name it 'Life is Good'. Well thanks, ...

Uh, GENIUS! Just sayin'. Yeah, this isn't something to critique, just something to enjoy. It's soo cool. Well, what else is there to say...? Keep writing, StoryWeaver

Okay, right off I love your character's voice, and that's what keeps me reading. Another quick thing I noticed is that you don't always get your grammar in - remember ...

This was really dramatic, which normally I don't like because it feels too over-the-top, but this was still really good. You play the words well and string them together to ...

Okay, really don't know how to feel about this piece. :? I wrote it up in a sum total of thirty seconds, so feel free to tear it apart. A ...

Warning: I might sound a lot meaner than I intend to. I'm sorry. :( Bear with me. OK, this was just kind of weak for a few reasons. First off, ...