StoryWeaver13

When the Pearly Gates will not let them pass And the flames of Hell are out of their grasp The dark world of Limbo's shore awaits them Them? Who's them? ...

These are both really pretty (can't see the third though) but there's too much sky. My main advice would just be to crop out a lot of the sky, because ...

Well, this was alright as far as poems go. It just felt like it was lacking some depth...and maybe expanding on the whole theme of it would just be helpful, ...

Maya carefully shut the ancient books of spells by Xavier Bloodrose as she watched her majestic amethyst - eyed raven perch on her small, wooden windowsill. On its leg was ...

Well what can I say that hasn't been said? This is a good piece of poetry, especially for somebody who doesn't write a lot of it. But I could kind ...

Okay, so I usually *hate* short-lined poems because they feel all choppy, but this one actually flowed pretty well. I don't know why, but it felt different in its own ...

LOVE your character so far. There's a dry, witty humor that is really cool. Do you know how many people try to be funny and then their "comical" character just ...

This is so relateable to me personally (and a lot of other people, I'm sure) and even though she's so self-defacing I do like her character pretty well. I guess ...

I actually really like this. The voice was simple but effective, and it had a lot of clever little twists and turns through it that was pretty stellar. As far ...

Whoa I'm in love with the song, and your voice! *Jealous* haha. Really, perfect. You play guitar well too. I totally relate to the song also, and there's seriously nothing ...

Pretty simple and some of the lines and comparisons are kind of cliche, but the twist at the end definately helped make it a little above-average. It is a cool ...

OK, pros and cons. Pros - Love where you're going with this! In general, the plot is ah-maz-ing. I'm not even a fan of romance, but this is sweet and ...

Chapter 1 - The Beginning Winter had rolled in sooner than usual in Connecticut , coating most of the city of West Haven in a blanket of thick fluffy white ...

This isn't too bad, but I can tell you're still learning. My suggestion would just be (for writing anything, poetry especially) to emphasize the emotional aspect of everything, so you ...

Wow, the colors of this are so pretty! The sky and the water are just perfect. There's kind of a lot of sky here, but the color makes up for ...