StoryWeaver13

This was really good! Sad to say, I don't really have any critiques, considering how well it's already been covered. And really, this doesn't need improvement to be a good ...

Dude, this was really cool (and I'm sorry if you're a girl, 'dude' is just my generic term). Well, anyway, your poem. This is pretty awesome, in my opinion. I ...

I agree with the first reviewer, the beginning was shaky but then it really took off, and the ending was cool. The further you got (and more morbid and twisted) ...

*Liked Haha, I really like this. It's cool, quirky, different, original. It has it's own unique attitude and edge. I think it could still be tweaked here and there, but ...

I think this was too short to really give us enough of an image or to really sympathize with or relate to the narrator's situation. It's just kind of average ...

I definately liked your first more than your second; the second just seems to be lacking a little, and I think the problem is because of the rhyme scheme you're ...

To me, the first fiew lines felt angsty. Passion is a meaningless, Empty, Wasted, Wasteful thing, I was thinking that the theme and feeling would only continue and leave you ...

I liked this. This sounds like something my dad would say, kind of "you get what you work for" ideology. But at first read it looks so simple, but then ...

First off, welcome to the site! Okay, so first off, to post your work you'd probably just want to copy and paste it onto here, it's just a little easier ...

After twenty or so minutes I would just change the order to "After twenty minutes or so..." That was the only grammar thing I caught. Otherwise, I'm not sure I ...

Alice gazed at the stars that surrounded her. They were pinpricks of light, of hope, among the deep engulfing dark. Her breaths came easily, despite the lack of oxygen around ...

Okay, so this is pretty awesome. I pretty have no complaints plot-wise so far except that maybe you could clarify what's happening a little more...but it's the prologue, so no ...

Wow, I need to make one of these. I was glad to see that I've done at least some things on your list, but I haven't done too many. Well, ...

With studying I have no time to work on my novel, so here's another poetry quick-write. Feel free to boo and hiss at this pathetic piece, as I spent virtually ...

Okay, here I am for another review after the prologue, even though Stephanie Meyer's totally ruined my appetite for vampire novels. Actually, this wasn't too bad. I think right now ...