StoryWeaver13

Dinner is still being digested in Tani’s stomach as her and her family drive down Main Street towards their home. It’s the day before her birthday and she’s excited because ...

Hey, thought I'd return your favor of reading my novel for reading yours! And so far, I like it. :D I just have a few things to pick on you ...

Thanks! And fearless, I'll definitely snoop around for your novel. ;) Edit: Oh, yeah, and for anybody looking for chapter 2, I accidentally posted it under short stories, so just ...

Suh-weet!!! Awesome idea ultraviolet, it's so hard to find people who'll follow your novel through. I don't care if you decide to keep up with mine or forget all about ...

This was really deep and descriptive, and I liked the intertwining images within this. There was also a good sense of flow and rhythm, and the whole thing was just ...

CHAPTER SEVEN Arie It was all a blur. A man in a white lab coat spoke first: “It’s almost finished.” My vertigo turned everything into a dreamlike half-reality. Walls were ...

CHAPTER SIX Jordan “-And that’s all that they would tell me.” My aunt, Carolina Sinclair, stood at the counter with her long slender fingers clasped worriedly around a mug of ...

This is good, but if I were ou I'd have this moved to the "lyrics" forum instead. I think the mods can help you with that if you send somebody ...

CHAPTER FIVE Lane “Come on, man, you have got to go with her.” Darrin’s big bear-hand, usually used for catching spirals, was now plowing me through a throng of people. ...

I really like your style, it's fast-paced with good word choice, and gives a really good mental image and some honest depth in your characters. Plot-wise I don't have any ...

Poppies grow among the mossy stones, about and around them; Some rest their heads on these stones as on a pillow for weariness; You use "stones" twice, so I'd change ...

I'm not really a fan of angsty "emo" poetry, but there was something sort of sweet-sounding about this, almost soft-spoken. So...I like this more than I usually like this type ...

I'll be honest; I wasn't a fan of this because of a few points - -It was list-like, and kind of dull -Part of it just sounds a little shallow ...

Chapter Four Arie “Help!” I bit my lip, doing everything I could not to scream. The blood was swelling around my ankle now, the sharp metal teeth of the hunter‘s ...

I like this! I wish I could know how it's intended to sound, but I think with a good beat this could be a really good song, something I'd listen ...