StoryWeaver13

Honestly, this poem felt a little weak for me. The overall story was kind of overdone and cliche, and then there's a sing-songy rhyme scheme that really doesn't help. I ...

This was really pretty, the way it just kind of rolls of your tongue and flows, but at the same time I felt like you were over-trying when it came ...

First (very rough) draft that needs a lot of criticism. Also, kind of lengthy I think, so tell me if I need to split it into a couple of pieces. ...

I love this! I wish I felt the same closeness with my sister. This was so cool, it just had a great kind of funny quality, but I think it ...

I think somebody already told you that the way you make pretty average, every-day objects look really cool just by focal points and playing with the light a little. I ...

Urgh, Warrior Princess, I loathe your ability with words. This is pure poetry (wait...okay, that saying is rendered a little pointless in this case...but I'm tired and you know what ...

This was sweet, but I agree with what I think LittlePetRock was saying; you build it up but then just kind of miss the mark and leave it kind of ...

This is a good plotline so far, I really like the girl character and the dynamics your characters have together. I think this needs some cleaning up, grammar-wise and tempo, ...

The bigger the heart the harder they fall, And down the boy fell. Through The cracks he dissipated, Through the boards he dropped. Past the rats and the drains and ...

This is a pretty cool beginning, although I'm not completely hooked. It just feels a little dry and common. I think you could find a more dynamic way of introducing ...

Just a little back-story on what this is symbolically about. It's based off of a dream I had, and the basic idea is about giving up innocence and overall who ...

This was entertaining to read, just kinda cute and funny and quirky, with its own simple little personality. I think it's kind of lacking in something that I can't put ...

This was a pretty cool story plot-wise, but you could've made it so much longer! Give us descriptions, emotions, etc. All-in-all, what I'm trying to say is that we need ...

Man, my dad's really sick right now so I know how it feels. You see death right in front of you, and for a second you're scared...then you're angry. Your ...

Ooh, this gave me honest shivers! The way you portrayed Macey, through the way she viewed things and the characteristics of her room, was really good. It made me sympathize ...