StoryWeaver13

I thought this was definitely a good poem, the way you wrote it flowed really well and definitely had a sharp mental image. There was only one thing I'd change: ...

Wow, this definitely felt powerful to me. I'm not a religious person, either, I'm not even sure what religion I can fairly belong to. I just felt like you portrayed ...

Cautiously, attentively, I listen. Are they asleep? My ears catch the muffled, gentle sounds of snoring. Yes, they are. Anxiously, I mince past them and proceed down the hallway. If ...

This was pretty good, but I just got the feeling that something was lacking here. It was solid start to finish, but I just didn't feel anything from it particularly. ...

The rehearsal date had already come , and the church members were bouncing in their seats , as they drove through the city. Madison looked back at her choir, kneeling ...

Overall I thought this was pretty good, so here's just a couple of things: The first thing is that the first verse, every line starts with "This is goodbye to..." ...

Look at it like lines, Nothing else attached. It’s not a nose, Not a zit, Or scar. Just flecks, spots - Lines, lines, lines. My eraser works like Madness on ...

The first reviewer did a really good job of picking out what little there was to fix about this piece, so overall there isn't much I can say except that ...

I can tell you right now that I'm not really happy with this chapter. It took over half an hour (meaning I passed my time limit) and I still just ...

It was 50 trillion lightyears from earth, the small world of Pyrigia Levis. As Nixie nimbly made her way through the Night Forest, she could even see the ambit of ...

This was kind of an interesting poem, though I do think it could be improved with minor tweaks here and there. In general, though, I found this really interesting and ...

Whoa, I really liked this. It had a loose flowing rhythm and for once I liked the lack of punctuation, which kind of emphasized it. The voice and style are ...

Chapter Three My life jacket instantly pulled me above the surface, and I found myself stuck under the upturned canoe. From outside of it to the right I heard Cass ...

I did definitely like your descriptions, but I actually kind of didn't like the fact that it was the same kind of rhyme over and over (ie. rhyming with light ...

I suppose there are places where this could be critiqued, but I don't feel like there's anything that really jumped out at me and it honestly looks fine as-is. In ...