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Wow. Is this an expression of how you feel?

Lord of the Rings started all the cliches. Every fantasy writer worth his salt borrows from Tolkein these days.

Don't use that trash can yet. This has potenial. One thing, though: don't end every line with a comma.

Hey there. Hope to see you in the forums soon. And, if you should have the urge, come into the chat. You'll be sure of a warm welcome.

synonyms: declared, stated, exclaimed, whispered, etc.

Carl Fenton: leader of the Dragon Remnant. Impatient, sometimes reckless, and a strong fighter. What I like about him: his quick thinking.

Feather A loner Description: a brown tabby, with unusually patterned stripes. Has bright green eyes with flecks of amber. Feather curiously sniffed the breeze. Storm coming, she decided. Before it ...

"Luke," Mark called from behind him. He jumped. "Oh, hi," he mumbled. He turned back to face the screen. Mark looked around at the room, the tidy bookshelves, the dark ...

I'm not sure what you're getting at. I know the narrator can "contact" people, but what does that mean? Why doesn't he talk?

Ah, what's the site?

I have an idea. A young boy finds a special cat on the streets. This cat is empathetic, meaning certain people can feel what she feels. They somehow end up ...

Chocolate?

Well, here's some advice: begin at the beginning. I'm guessing they want an original story, written specifically for the contest. This is my first year too, so we'll figure it ...

You did tend to lapse into present tense a lot. Like "The cavern is full of lava" and so on. Otherwise, the story was well written and the action flowed ...

Hi there. I'm Kyte, or you could call me Jorin, 'cause that's my name.