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I like this. It gives an accurate portrait of how a survivor would feel.

Wow. That was powerfully written.

My advice is not to clump everything together. Separate each paragraph by at least one line.

Good job. The poem was well written and gave a clear sense of the king's defeat.

Though he couldn't read, Marcus recognized the red shield of the Salvation Army. He tugged open the door and stepped inside. Mica followed him a few steps behind. She let ...

Good job, Fl.

Wow. That was beautiful.

"Gum? What's a dragon want with gum?" Carl Fenton What's your favorite dragon story?

Well, a big hello to all. Kyte's the name, and fantasy is the genre.

Jacob Cloral We finally made to one of Cloral's floating cities. I looked around and was disappointed not to see any other Travelers. "Has anyone seen Bobby Pendragon?" I hollered. ...

Like I always say: En garde! Cliche! One I find particularly annoying is the "keys to the kingdom" approach, where the band of heroes has to find pieces of an ...

That's the thing, see. He's a boarding student. I agree about the jump though; I'll post the rest of chapter one.

Ok.. *nerves self up* I'll try putting my work in the forums.

I can't seem to get off the ground. I asked for help onsite, but nobody answered yet. So, how do you send an excerpt?

The weirdest-and the coolest- is the Kingdom Keepers.