Stori

This has a very strong rythm. Keep it up.

Good job. I didn't find any obvious errors.

You could have an author's note in the work that says her name means "two."

I think you should keep the name Deuce.

Taking his drink to a corner, Kyte plugs in his brand-new computer. "Let's see," he mutters, "where did I put that story?" He finds the story and glances up. All ...

A poem that length needs some punctuation. Other than that, I liked it.

It needs a little work. Few spelling mistakes, nothing major. You might want to slow down and talk a little about the characters and setting. Give us more of a ...

Bravo! I only noticed one mistake: you slipped into third person during the talk with Ms. Roberts.

"Hey, school pictures are coming up." Wes handed me a packet. I opened it and took out the usual order form and brochure. "Hmm, they're offering black and white this ...

Hello, my name's Jorin. I'm a fantasy buff mostly. Science fiction works too.

I'm Jorin, otherwise know as Kyte. Welcome to the site.

Correct me if I'm wrong, but I think you mentioned her living in Canada twice.

My elf name is Findecano Calmcacil. Not sure what that means.

Hi there laf. I was in the neighborhood, so i dropped by.

Hello Anna. My name's Jorin. I write fantasy and science fiction, and a little poetry. Well, what else can I say?