Stori

That's ok. You might want to keep your other character though.

It's very supenseful. You showed how Dave felt well.

Anyone can join. Not sure what you mean by a character made by the game's creator.

Hi there. I'm Jorin.

You're just starting out on your journey, with a few friends along. Traveling the world sounds like fun... Rules: 1.Two characters per person, five per caravan. 2.You can team up ...

Hi. My real name's Jorin, but everybody calls me Kyte. I write fantasy, a little sci-fi and some realistic fiction.

A good piece. I didn't see any obvious errors.

The concept is interesting. You just need to flesh out the writing. Tell us more about Rowan: what he looks like, what he likes to do,

I would put that in Tips and Discussion, not storybooks, if I were you.

Blaze Dunedogs He pawed impatiently at the earth, watching as the others talked about the meeting. Blaze never was one for talk. "We should go soon," the alpha female insisted. ...

You really felt like that?

Kyte reaches for his drink, sees that it's not there, and frowns. "Who took that? Bartender!" The man scurries up. "More of the same, sir?" "Yes," Kyte says and goes ...

Name: Blaze Pack: Dunedog Rank: Middle-aged Sire: Dunedog Dame: Golgot

Whoa, that is creepy.

The revision was good.