Stewie32887

I didn't find you nitpicky in the slightest! I agree with most of your critiques and really appreciate the help! Many thanks!

Thanks so much to everyone that's taken the time to give this story a spin. I really appreciate it and I'll try to reciprocate in the future. So far it ...

My biggest concern with this piece is essentially the ending. My wife and a former professor have both read it and agreed that the last bits of it, while dramatic, ...

The mistakes that others have already pointed out aside, I enjoyed this. That said, I feel like this is something that work better as an extend work rather than a ...

I felt at times like you were trying a bit too hard with your descriptions. "The moonlight cast an eerie glow about the girls raven hair and milky skin. Her ...