Squishy

okaaayy. i liked the fact that you made use of the English language by not using overly cliche words, phrases and descriptions. i would locate the main character on a ...

you definitely got meyer's writing style down, which is hard for writers to do and I have seen many try and fail, but you got it. this scene vaguely reminds ...

you present a different style of writing where the narrator is just as active in the actual story as the characters are. the narrator here converses directly with the audience ...

okay, your writing reminds me alot of someone sitting down in front of me and telling me how their day went. this made it a little choppy to read and ...

you know, you have a gift for setting scene and place like no other. i really got into the story line, and the blurb at the beginning heigtened interest and ...

okay, I am really familiar with greek mythology, so this was a fun and entertaining story because I was "in the loop". But for others who didn't spend a year ...

okay. i opened your thread and immediatly saw how short this was. i thought, okay, this is an attention grabber, brief and to the point. but then reading it, it ...

duhduhduhduhduh... oh mmy gosh... that was awesome! you got me interested with the opening dialogue. breathing underwater.. coolio! i actually wanted to read more becaseu it wasn't corny. great naviga

i like the use of 'batty'. its a fun word that we as language-downplaying humans don't use anymore and that fact that you threw it in gave me a good ...

beauty mark okay, i don't know what you think of when you say beauty mark, but i think of a birth mark/ sunspot and the fact that you named it ...

sorry, but i havn't read the next chapter, so i'm reviewing quite blindly. good creepy descriptions of the two tuxedoed dudes. threatening, but their larger size hint to a domination ...

ohhhh! i'm the first one to read this... happy dance. starting off, i like the idea of the musical. it will be dark and twisted and an edgier side of ...

ahh the complexity of the human mind. I applaud this story for many reasons that are a little personally based and not at all literary. 1. you use words that ...

okee dokee.. um, you jumped into the plot (which is okay lit device) but you need to give us some background. This case is not even close to being solved ...

Agree that exact time shouldn't be used because way back when, common folk didn't utilize the wonders of clocks. hard to believe anyone could live without one. Anyways, you might ...