Squishy

Good writing, but all together too short. It's like I got hit by a freight train made of chocolate. yes, it was enjoyable, being smothered in a fountain of gooey ...

the first thing i though when i read about the vampire and werewolfs was "omg twilight" be careful that you don't steal from twilight because it tends to turn readers ...

stranger in a strange land by heinlind..... READ IT!!! and i can't believe im about to say it please don't shoot me and please don't mock me ahhhh i almost ...

i've got to say, you hooked me with the prologue, :lol: i agree with the above writers, but i have to dissagree with a couple of things. :? 1) their ...

i agree. the last line does nothing for the conclusions but I LOATHE present tense whenever i read it, but you executed it so well, I didn't even notice. Published ...

It was Saturday morning and I walked into work to help look for my article. I didn’t dress as “formal” as I usually do: pin stripe shorts and a black ...

this didnt necessarily make me laugh but i dind't read the first one either. either way I LOVED IT>>>> i've gone through similar circumstances in my life (without the ksising ...

i liked the previous suggestions... and you should definitely keep those in mind. as for the drink thing... i like the fact that you kept the Russian tradition and used ...

okay... referring to Quote: Good-looking guys like him always LOVE the good-looking girls like Katie Last thing, but I would change this as well. You've used 'good-looking' twice in one ...

okay, you succeeded in using formal wording without awkwardness or confusion, and the language was executed perfectly with no (or not obvious to me) flaws. the problem I have, though, ...

i live in Idaho (close enough :lol: ) and you captured the area exactly... there was a double use of the word "hooves" which I stumbled across. using the same ...

i just read everyone's posts and DON"T LISTEN TO THEIR HARSH CRITICISM> it a cruel cruel world and what you got to do is just keep writing. just keep writing ...

okay, i liked it, but it all went a little fast. the plot line is wonderful for romantic fiction, and is a good base for you to go farther. you ...

the only thing i can say is that the 'past' and 'present' switches were a little hard to keep up with so you might want to lead up to them ...

hmmm.. amazing..! i hate to sound discriminatory, but I've known people overweight who just complain and complain and never do anything. that just gets on my nerves. if you have ...