Squishy

This is just a little section from larger piece I'm writing, but wanted it to be critiqued. Suggestions on how to amplify Melancholy's weird-ness wound be appreciated. Here we go! ...

i got alot of comments about how out of place my posting of Melancholy was, so i decided to put on the first section that leads up to the part ...

I fumbled with the note as we drove down the backcountry highway in silence. I wasn't even thinking about its contents; I was just thinking about me, Brian, and the ...

Hey yall. I wrote this but didn't review (I'm sorry! Writer's sin!) so tear the thing apart and edit like mad! ___ She stood in the doorway, hot air sticking ...

stranger in a strange land isn't just a bunch of "philosophical fluff" have you even attempted to read "zen and the art of motorcycle maintenance?" or "brave new world" idiots ...