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I like to thank Ending Karama. If it wasn't for you mate, I wouldn't have pushed myself to my limit in developing the story to it's fullest potential. Thank you ...

Until now, I have yet to type the word naive. I apologize for critiquing it. I'm not trying to start a bash war here, so I'm hoping (assuming) that we ...

Maybe it's just because fantasy fiction isn't my cup of tea, but I didn't really get into this. It was mildly enjoyable, but that's stretching it a tad for me. ...

Thank you Rieda and Ktk. Anyhoo, I have made a few more edits to prologue and ch 1 and I have posted a bit of chapter 2. Please crit on ...

Thank you magic and ele for your review. With all the reviews I have receieved, I managed to come up with another way to express the story. I was eating ...

Thanks for all for the reviews. I worked according to what most had said and began clearing out what I believe is purple proses. I have hosted the edited version ...

I liked how you described the action, though I'm confused as how the characters got this way. Maybe you should write a prologue which details the events?