Spitfire

Hey everyone! I know I haven't posted in a while, but I've been busy with school. So hope you enjoy it :D Chapter 12 I stared in shock at the ...

Okay, well since I had already commented on the original chapter of this one, I'll just add one thing :lol: : I haven’t been able to follow any else life ...

Okay, so here I am to review the edited version. I just noticed a few things... Millie stood there and gaped. He had never asked her that before ? Why ...

Jut like rename the titles, like do your chapter 1-2-3-4-5 in order, and then for the ones where the MC is Alice, just add (different version) or something like that ...

Okay well you concentrate on your exams, for now. :smt002 But when you're finished, I suggest you organize your chapters, because this is really confusing for people. You got like ...

Hey there MMinc! Spitfire here to review! It’s impossible not to an automatic voice called from deep inside her head, fizzed and flat from all the time it had not ...

Hey there MMinc! Okay so I read the chapter. It had a lot of problems, but everyone else seemed to have said them already, so I won't bother. Moving on, ...

Okay, I was a little confused about chapter 6, but I finally got what you meant. So here I go! “It’s an honor your majesty.” bowed the Ven before Rhea. ...

First of all, I so didn't nag! I threatened you to post, completely different! :lol: Anyways, I'm reading the chapter, and I only noticed two things: As I stared at ...

I don't think so!!! I'll make sure of it :wink: Nah, it can happen, but so far I've thought of the details, so it'll be for later on that I'll ...

Hey girls! Thanks for the comments! For Tanya, the name was intentional, of course. And Nicolas really is in his fifties, since as I said, Nana gave birth when she ...

Here you go guys, the next chapter. Not much else to say but that, so enjoy :D Chapter 11 My hands were sweaty as I fidgeted them restlessly. I'd been ...

Thanks for the comments guys!...well girls :lol: I hadn't noticed the "soup" though, so I'll go change that right now... As for the cop, he's going to be a part ...

Hey there TH! Sorry it took me so long to get to the fourth chapter; I thought I had read it all, but remembered I'd stopped in the middle 'cause ...

No problem :wink: