SpiritedWolfe

Thank you so much. I know I need to describe the place more, but I didn't feel like there was a time that it would ing stick out (such as ...

I guess I might have misunderstood the part where her friend is 'proving' herself. And my ideas are just advice, it's your choice whether you take it or not. Didn't ...

Thanks so much for the criticism. To be perfectly honest I didn't spend as much time on this chapter, obviously leaving holes. I'll be sure to try to use some ...

Thanks! I guess I'm usually hard on myself since I always strive to be prefect (which I know will never happen xD). Thanks for the review anyway!

I guess I should have made it more clear that her "home" hasn't been her real home for her entire childhood. And I don't understand what you mean by "never ...

Thank you so much, and I'll probably will just call it the first chapter.