SpiritedWolfe

Yep, the thing about there being other Syrinists out there was the entire reason I struggled through this scene. (The biggest reason I cringed during your review was when I ...

Thank youuuuu .>) I really appreciate all the critique~!

Those darn plot holes, worming their way into everything ;-; (You could remove Mina next draft, because, honestly, she hasn't seemed that important. Unless something happens in this last, last ...

Thanks you so much! Your review helped me so much in areas I struggled the most with, thank you! ^^

Thanks so much, Wolfie! Yep. This chapter came with a dramatic struggle xD I guess it came up several times where I have a reason for something, but didnt include ...

Thanks so much! I definietly agree on all your points, with the mention of the father (which I added last minute xD) to the cobalt. I was hoping for a ...

Perhaps I should show why Sam is so mad better. Basically, he feels like Carsten betrayed the Syrinists. By telling the Guards about the gathering tonight, Sam instantly thinks to ...

I can understand that, though I didn't actually get it xD Perhaps that's just me not liking to look deep into things. Though, I may recommend -- if you wish ...

Think about it, Noelle. In your subconscious, you can't lie. Sam knows Carsten was doing something. He may be a little over-dramatic, but there's no easy way to defend that. ...

You're amazing .> Like, Ashley was planning on betraying her team to join Sam's and all that, but it never got across. I'll take that all into consideration next draft! ...

Ahh. Totally understandable. :3 (Ouch >.

I was feeling sarcastic xD

Oh my gosh, Pomp, you're amazing xD But, as you'll see, this would not, not, not work as the first chapter >.> Too much of a jump between the two. ...

Don't worry, Noelle. This is the prologue ^^ The rest of the novel is present first... It's my baby. But thanks for the review!

Oh, and I have yet to say, thank you! Your reviews make my day