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Re: Present Does not Fix the Past: Chaper II
Hello Mersize, Wolf here *finally* for a promised review. So I'll do a few nitpicks first: He was by his own; he did not care, though. Two things: First, the ...
Jun 23, 2014 -
Re: Silence is Silver, Chapter 13.
Hey Raven, Wolf here for another review. I really liked the character interactions in this. Even though Brandon is like the 'bad guy' here, there's still this evil charm he ...
Jun 23, 2014 -
Re: The Boys in Blue Chapter 2
Hello NotRes, Wolf here for a review. So, Noelle covered most of the basic plot issues and concepts, so I'll just say a few things about that, which I felt, ...
Jun 23, 2014 -
Re: Chapter One: Kahlizii
Hello Proud, Wolf here for a review. Wow, I just really loved this. Your imagery was fantastic and really, once I got going, I was just got lost in your ...
Jun 20, 2014 -
Re: Prologue
Hello Liam, Wolf here for a review. Alright, some things I noticed: First, everytime new dialogue is stated, an new paragraph must be started. Here's an example from the work: ...
Jun 20, 2014 -
Re: The Last Breath of Fire Chapter 4
Hey Zont, Wolf here for a review. Little tiny nitpick for you: “Oh, I am old. I know many people, both dangerous and helpful. [ The last '[' should be ...
Jun 20, 2014 -
Re: Jasper Chp.1
Hello polka, Wolf here for a review. (Please excuse any grammatical/spelling mistakes, for I am on a phone, with one hurt hand.) So a few little nitpicks: He had walked ...
Jun 18, 2014 -
Re: Tales of a Tabaxi, Prologue: Arrival
Hello Swiftfur, Wolf here for a review. I've got one little nitpick: She looked very much human... I found this part a little awkwardly worded. I would recommend changing it ...
Jun 17, 2014 -
Re: Life after him ~ Chapter 1 ~
Hello Dawny, Wolf here for a review. First off, some nitpicks: Grace asked, curiosity taking over her features. I think this is a strange way to say that she's curious. ...
Jun 17, 2014 -
Re: The Wolves Prey - The Deer gets the last laugh
Hello Wolves, Wolfare here for a review. So this is a very... interesting piece. One problem I notice a lot is run-on sentences. I'm pretty sure most, if not all, ...
Jun 17, 2014 -
Re: Selfless Boys- Chapter 1
Hello Nekomimi, Wolf here for a review. I will start off with a little technical thing. I do notice that no paragraphs are used. So a new paragraph should be ...
Jun 16, 2014 -
Re: Ordadus- Chapter Four
Hello Wolfie, Wolfare here for a review. Oh my goodness. Must you tease us with such a short chapter? Haha, just kidding, but still, this is (as usual) very well ...
Jun 14, 2014 -
Re: How To Train Your Dragon Chapter 3- That Wasn't In The Plan!
Hello Puppys, Wolf here for a review. First off, some nitpicks: I could tell he had a rough day looking for the dragons nest. How? How did she know? What ...
Jun 14, 2014 -
Re: There She Sat
Hello Writer, Wolf here for a review. Wow, this was truly beautiful. Your imagery is just fantastic, and the descriptions are lovely. You have a serious talent here, having also ...
Jun 13, 2014 -
Re: Let Him Go(Parody of Let it Go)
Hello Katya, Wolf here as requested. So I remember writing this with you, so I do notice some major changes. First off, the first line: "The kitty walks down the ...
Jun 13, 2014
