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  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: In an Instant

    Archer and Cody should be more three-deminsional and developed.

    Mon Dec 29, 2008 7:46 pm
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: In an Instant

    The story was cute, but not great. The characters, especially the Archer and Cody, should have been developed more, they come off as two-deminsional.

    Mon Dec 29, 2008 7:45 pm
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Kiss of an Enemy

    And here I was, all alone with him in the hallway. Oh God. Never start a sentence off with 'And,' it would make it a sentence fragement.

    Mon Dec 29, 2008 7:05 pm
  • Short Story » General, General Re: a strange story

    i know you are aware of your many mistakes, but just for the sake of critqueing : "Oh what a friendly welcome." should be changed to "Oh, what a friendly ...

    Sat Jan 19, 2008 4:23 am
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Story Deleted

    ‘Wait. The… ground? How did I end up on the ground?’ "you never have to put thoughts in these: ' ' " - words from my eight grade honors Language ...

    Sat Jan 19, 2008 4:18 am


Besides, if you want perfection, write a haiku. Anything longer is bound to have some passages that don't work as well as they might.
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