SpencerNolanRivers

Archer and Cody should be more three-deminsional and developed.

The story was cute, but not great. The characters, especially the Archer and Cody, should have been developed more, they come off as two-deminsional.

And here I was, all alone with him in the hallway. Oh God. Never start a sentence off with 'And,' it would make it a sentence fragement.

i know you are aware of your many mistakes, but just for the sake of critqueing : "Oh what a friendly welcome." should be changed to "Oh, what a friendly ...

‘Wait. The… ground? How did I end up on the ground?’ "you never have to put thoughts in these: ' ' " - words from my eight grade honors Language ...