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  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Key (part 1)

    Hi. My name is Kiara and I've read about 1/3 of the whole thing. There are several errors that can easily be fixed by proof-reading over this again, so not ...

    Mar 31, 2011
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Silver Be Thy Steps Part 1

    Hi. My name is Kiara, and I'll be critiquing your work here. The thought of him made me so, so angry. There isn't a need for the second "so." No, ...

    Dec 24, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Morning Has Broken

    Hey, there. My name is Kiara, and I shall be reviewing your entry right here, right now. Red = inserting something that should be there. Blue = a correction that ...

    Jun 18, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: The Story, The Song, and The Picture (chapter two)

    Hello, Again. Ugh, I know, not this girl again. Hahaha. I'll be reviewing this second chapter now, since I liked the first one so much. Glen put his headphones in ...

    Jun 16, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: The Story, The Song, and The Picture (chapter one)

    Hallo, ich bin Kiara. That is "Hello, I am Kiara" in the German language. I will be reviewing this chapter of your piece, here. Possibly, if I enjoy it a ...

    Jun 16, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Fearless (Edited)

    Hello, I am Kiara. You can call me Kiki if you'd like, a lot of people do. I will be reviewing your story here. ...now he’s dumping me like a ...

    Jun 16, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Forgetting (Edited)

    Hello! My name is Kiara, and I'll be reviewing your work here. With a struggle , I pull myself back to the present to answer it. "Hello," I say way ...

    Jun 15, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: 42

    Hello. I am Kiara, and I'll be critiquing your work here. Mr . Bynes was one of a kind. If you are going to be using the abbreviated form of ...

    Jun 11, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Silently Spoken

    Hello, my name is Kiara and I will be critiquing your work here. Oh… there’s a lot I can say about him. The underlined bit serves no purpose. Why is ...

    Jun 11, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Deleted

    Hello. My name is Kiara, and I will be reviewing/critiquing your piece today. Everything that defines who and what I am has made me different, strange, foreign ; an outsider. ...

    Jun 8, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Don't Cry, Amy

    They got him yesterday . They said that on the news. I move forward s and backwards in the same fast pace It’s somewhat soothing, I think . The motion, ...

    May 9, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: A Single Rose

    He placed a single rose in my hand . I clenched it too tight, causing the thorns to cut into my hand Redundant. They started inching closer and closer and ...

    May 9, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Passing Through

    I really enjoyed this piece. You are a swell writer, and only made a few mistakes on grammar and punctuation, which would easily be fixed by proof-reading. Although, I believe ...

    May 8, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The White Knight Chapter 3(B) The Training Begins (New)

    Hey, girl, hey! I am Kiara, and I will be critiquing your piece. Even though the chain mail was considerably lighter than the plate armor ( and she could move ...

    May 6, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Fall

    Hello, I am Kiara, and I will be correcting and critiquing your work here. that is when he had been alive. this was all so odd. she shut her eyes ...

    May 6, 2010


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