Speele

Well. With so many reviews before me, most of what I saw has been covered so I don't really feel the need to repeat. There is just one little tiny ...

Well. The reviews here seem pretty harsh. While I admit, the idea has been done time and time again, that doesn't make it any less true. And writing the same ...

Wow. Wonderful. I liked the beginning, but the end was awesome, and the middle was intricate. stable and wonderful, perfect and known to everyone, pinned in words against a page, ...

Well. It was certainly horrifying, which was obviously the goal here. So, success, I suppose! The only comments I can make are pointing out the lines I really like, which ...

Best advice for this poem would have to be edit. Here's a few little mistakes that really interupted the flow for me. In the first verse, I beleive that 'spec' ...

It was okay. A few things though took away from the power. When a poem is that short it has grab you by the shirt front, throw you in the ...

The characters aren't fully developed, but you didn't have much time to do so. I actually think Marcus had a very real personality considering what a short time you had ...

I actually disagree. I loved the last two lines. My main problem with this peice was that it was rather.... done. You know. And while almost anything you write will ...

I really loved this. The only critique I could do has nothing to do with wording and more to do with how this works musically. But obviously I cannot help ...

It's pretty and emotional,, and dramatic. I loved it. I agree that the title didn't totally fit, but your imagery was impeccable, so just mess with the title a little. ...

Agreed big-time about the sentence fragments. They are like many peices of different puzzles all thrown together. the hooks and holes cannot connect. Flow is interupted when you have to ...

I agree that the topic is not clearly defined. I have a bit of an idea, but that's only because I read it three times then came too my own ...

But what is that something bigger, a few of the good people in the world might be inclined to ask themselves or perhaps someone else. Long sentence. Too long. It ...

The city's dark corners treacherously reveal it for what it truly is. Like last nights garbage, the facade of organization and beauty is gone, leaving just the bones of the ...

Nice camera, I can see. I love photos two and three. they are both very alive and wonderful to look at. You just wanna cuddle something! Definetly gave me a ...