SophieSays

Thanks both of you. You've both given me some stuff to think about and I am definitely going to do a rewrite now. I am also going to take another ...

Thanks everyone! I decided not to post this in Fantasy Fiction as at the moment the fantastical elements are a minor part. Here is a link to the second part: ...

Thanks everyone for your lovely comments. This is my first proper project for a while, so its nice to know I haven't become too rusty! Part two should be out ...

This is really good - KanenRenoir has pointed out most of the things I had a problem with - I don't have time to review it today, but if you ...