SophiaBurnette

First of all, I really like your title. "Inter" as you probably know, is the Latin word for "between", which is very appropriate. I loved your story. It takes a ...

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I loved the suspense and the action! Your style is one that draws the reader in, which is key in good (and addicting) writing. It will keep readers hooked and ...

I like where this is going. The beginning is very sad, but that's good because your character has some very realistic emotional baggage, which I'm assuming will come into play ...

Prologue: Storm Clouds A hush descended over the crowded auditorium as the red velvet curtains drew back to reveal a man. He was rather stout, with bushy brown hair and ...

Yes, and I'm about to post the prologue on YWS. :smt001 I have no idea what it's going to be called, but it's the beginning of a historical fiction series. ...

This is an excellent piece! I love the flow of the writing, and also the message. I can't really think of anything to criticize, so congratulations on a job well ...

Ouch! I really feel the speaker's pain and frustration at being rejected. The rhyme and rhythm are both very common, but that's okay because something common is a good base ...

This is a very good poem. It's well paced with clear meaning. Your poem has a vaguely musical quality to it, which makes it very readable. I can't really think ...

This is very good! You are good at creating suspense and moving the plot well. That said, you could have made the chapter a little longer, or built the suspense ...

Hey, I love this story. It's very cute and quite true to life. Most of your grammar was addressed in the last review, so I'll talk about format. Your format ...

Haha, this is a really cute poem, not to mention I really agree with the message. YWS IS the best! :D (and I only joined yesterday…)

What I liked: The impressionism. I like how your poem bounce around, but it wasn't too all over the place. All the ideas in here still add up to one ...

This song is from my musical, Drama with Lyrics (the title is subject to change) It's about two actresses who used to be best friends. One, Elise, never gives up ...

I really like where this story is going! Are the missing/killed child and the wolf connected? Did the wold kill the child? OH THE SUSPENSE!…Suspense and loose ends are really ...