Sonlen

Okay, it's kind of confusing overall, I still don't get why she was kidnapped or by who, or the basic storyline, it's all kind of, well, very confusing. Also in ...

Mmmkay, It is kind of confusing, but a prologue or more info later in the story could fix that. And already is already, not all ready. Only other thing is ...

You have to visit the site to get the full thing, and a lot of things are explained later. You might want to specify what I need to fix before ...

You don't need to use ALL CAPS for exclamation in a lot of places, firstly. Also a bit after the beginning of the chapter everything starts to blur together, it ...

Yes, it is improper grammar to have two different people speaking in the same paragraph. Also, you need to figure out how to use quotation marks, instead of putting “Sisters” ...

Sorry, I put this in the wrong forum, don't move it please, just delete it, I already put it in the right forum

Well, here is the first bit of what I have so far. For the full story background visit my site at I can't figure out how to make the link, ...

Well this is really my first serious novel, I have a few that I have started, but this is really the main thing that I'm writing. Just so ya know, ...

This sounds like a great idea. I agree, there is a lot of hype about vampires so it's good that we get some nice werewolf books out now. Please post ...

Hey everyone, I'm here to meet more people that I consider intelligent and creative. (You're lucky to find the first here, forget the second). Well, I mainly enjoy writing fantasy ...

This is really good! The only improvements I can think of have already been stated.