Sofiel

I liked the idea behind this, it was interesting. The first two complete phrases ended with the same word. You might want to find another word to use instead. H ...

Thanks OnCeUpOnAtIm3Xo and clograbby. The crits were very helpful, and I'm working on adding more. It might take a while, considering our graduation ceremony is tomorrow... There are about 10 ...

I have no clue where this is going, but I decided to write an introduction anyway... _ Prologue “Don't be such a fusspot Nathaniel,” God roared, “you'll be fine! Need ...

I hate the way i cringe when some one speaks your name i hate the way you drive me postivily insane When people speak highly of you makes me want ...

First, I really liked the idea and emotion in here. Some of the words and descriptions made it hard to understand, or to connect with the poem. You start off ...

I really liked the idea, and the emotion behind this. It was filled with metaphors and symbolism, that with a little work could help the reader find a mental picture. ...

I absolutely love this. You used very descriptive and emotive words to describe the situation humanity is in. My only concern is a line in the 4th stanza. And the ...

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Oh, my god. This is brilliant. Others already mentioned little word changes and such, but someone said that it was too short. On the contrary, I think it cuts through ...

Absolutely amazing. I'm jealous of your ability to rhyme! :) On another note, I find you repeat 'understand' a lot, it takes away from the poem. I wasn't looking at ...

I really like this poem, and the message it sends. The abusive man/woman being weak, and the victim becoming stronger. What exactly is the pyramid you refer to? Perhaps you ...

I apologise in advance to anyone who actually has synesthesia and thinks my take on it is wrong. I wrote this for a school assignment after reading 'A Mango-Shaped Space'. ...

First off, this is amazing! The first line reminded me of Boulevard of Broken Dreams by Greenday, but I forgot that once I read the rest. It seems really well ...

Okay, too funny. I would say I love the idea, but apparently it was an accident.. Which really makes it even better. :) How about irritated, axious/worried?

I love this! Also, I'm happy someone turned Bella into a vampire! The first few paragraphs are very short, and to the point. Could you possibly expand on the ideas, ...