Snoink

^ Has an avatar with a horse butt on it. XD

PETA's protests distract away from what should be its cause: to encourage people to treat animals better. They should do well with toning down its attitude.

I would rather have a nice park there. :P

Sometimes violent music serves a very good purpose. In the 1992 USA Presidential election, one song that was under attack was called, "Cop Killer." I looked at the lyrics and ...

^ Has been critiqued by Snoink for both the first and second parts.

Is this autobiographical? Twice in the story, you put semicolons where there should be apostrophes, be careful of that. Also, take care of sounding repetive. This piece wasn't bad, but ...

It'll be so easy. Nobody'll know I meant to do it. If I time it right everyone will think it was just an accident. Do it a few minutes before ...

Sure! You gotta look better than me! :D

You used adjectives to your full advantage! Good job.

:( There heads came off easily without me trying to mutilate them.

Yes but... I was giving my opinion! :lol: Listen to Reichieru. She's always right. :D

I want to be a professional writer! That is, I want to write the obituraries in some newspaper! :D

^ Has an interesting blog.

The best thing you can do is just to start writing. As you have it, I have no opinions about the story (except that sentence combination skills might be a ...

Why are you describing all of their physical appearences? When you do describe character, do not use slang like, "six pack." My first thought was "a six pack of what? ...