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This is neat! But I would like to see more line breaks...

Simplicity is an art. :) Creating an image in the reader's head is the first step in poetry, and strangely enough simple images can convey so much more than long ...

I don't know... it seems like your trying to force in all these big sounding words when some smaller ones would do just fine. Especially thE word "recipient." I don't ...

The first story I wrote was a full picture book called, "The Pilgrim Pig." The book was about the first Thanksgiving, and strangely enough, I researched for that story before ...

Well... me being the silly essayist I am, I look at the story I'm working on and find something to research indepth. For example, the effects of heroin. It's cool, ...

Well... the pitbull isn't a recognized breed here in the United States, so it basically is a mutt. Even so, most of the pitbull attacks come from males that are ...

3/10 Funny, but the grammar.... :twisted:

^ Is, unfortunately, right.

Carrot cake all the way! Hey Gal, if you have carrot cake cupcakes, can I go to your wedding?

^ Doesn't know who David Bowie is.

I know, I know, just trying to be somewhat helpful as an art critic. :P

Well... it's not much to comment on, but there were several spelling errors. My finger was really hurting the other day, so I can understand completely if you typed too ...

Ooo! Cute! I wanna see this colored! ;)

Everything in color looks vivid and three dimensional. The real thing that is making this look dull is the face and hands look two dimensional. It makes it look very ...

2/10 Too many kisses.