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To their *credit* they are starting to introduce some yummy salads. The salads are quite tasty in fact. :D

Some lesbians would rather not have a sperm donor. *shrugs*

It's funny when we say something, we instantly begin to feel it. ^_^;; Tell yourself that you're having fun, and then have fun.

Well... it just eludes the reader, unless they want to look up the breed. Instead of saying the breeds name, I would stick with just describing what the horse looked ...

Not only were you in the past tense last chapter, but you switch tenses in this! Sometimes there are reasons why you can change tenses. For example, if I have ...

I don't like the name "Lipizzaner." Otherwise, it seems interesting enough.

Wow... so the lack of the letter "e" wasn't noticable. I'm glad. And Shriek, this story was one of the most difficult stories I've ever written just because of that ...

I want no part of it. I sigh, my body sliding down with a dull thump and I blink slowly at six words. Only six words. Words that disturb, words ...

Well... it is slightly true. Your thyroid, which is the part that controls metabolism, goes crazy when you hit 50 or so, especially in women. The best thing you can ...

This is being taken a little too far, isn't it?

A critique on critiquing, eh? Interesting idea, Incan! ;) And you're totally right... up to a point, this doesn't work for poetry. This is mostly for prose. But still... comments ...

It’s funny how we spend so much time on how to write stories, and yet there is hardly any information about how to write a proper critique. It’s kind of ...

LOL! And we can't forget this comment: "Wow! You're story reminds me of this story! And this story! And this story! And--"

9/10 Very poignant.

They are. Check it out... (4-y)+1=y (4-2.5)+1=2.5 2.5=2.5 jennafina, I'm still trying to figure the matrice thing... I haven't dealt with that yet. XP