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Well hi there. :] So I had a couple things I feel as if I should maybe bring to light here with this piece. First of all you start this ...

Hi there. :] Well, in general I guess I understand the concept of what you have here. After one date 'such and such' happens. It was very short however, and ...

Well hi there! :mrgreen: First off, Sweethearts, I just want to say that I think that although this was very simply written and there wasn't much to the depth to ...

Hello. :mrgreen: I suppose to start of, as for the cutting used to dramatize this opening of the scene, I think that how you went about it was a little ...

H'okay, I'm here. :mrgreen: So, to start things off I did have a few general tiffs with this last chapter. Probably because it is in fact the last chapter, so ...

*arrives out of breath* Jas, hello. :mrgreen: No of course I didn't forget you. Onto this review! As a general first thing to start things off, I'd like to bring ...

Hi there! :mrgreen: So I read over chapter one for good measure. Thank you for linking me to it. I'll go ahead and review this chapter for you though now ...

Took me awhile to come back to review this time. x] Sorry about that. Almost finished though, so I'm gonna do these reviews back-to-back. As for some basic things with ...

Sarebear, hello there. :mrgreen: I see this is a pretty short piece you have here. All the more easier to really soak in what you have to show me. x) ...

This chapter was much longer, so I feel like I have twice the nitpickiness going on. x) Hope you don't mind. I also have a lot of opinions and whatnot, ...

I'm flattered you requested me to come review this. :mrgreen: At least now I know my reviews give you some sort of decent perspective. I'll try and be good about ...

So, a few things just to start out in general. Ross seems to be the one taking predominate control of the whole situation in this chapter I see. Perhaps he's ...

JP, m'lad, 'tis I again to come and lend another review. x] I'll just go ahead and jump right into it with some quotes and thoughts and opinions. Though I ...

Halfway there. 8) Yeah, I'm relishing in it a little bit. This met my exact expectations, JP. You definitely kept the pace and everything is right settled where it seems ...

Hi there. :mrgreen: So I read your story, and I think that although you chose a very striking topic to write about, you may not have projected the issue as ...