SmylinG

Personally, and I don't me to sound like a complete downer when I say this, I agree with the other reviews posted. It was kind of empty. Almost rushed through. ...

What a cute, and sad little story :( Poetry really does help get out best the things you want to say. Although, personally, I feel it would have flowed a ...

Material things weather and age, Untouchable love, a turning page. A book unwritten, Left for two single hearts to script their own. To be continued, A priceless possession.

This was great :) even with all the different forms of poetry it fit so neatly together. Like a telling of a story through different languages. But it all made ...

This is so romantic ! I love, love, love it!.. Not many people can write romance novels in this way. Your writing and your way of words is so unique. ...

Overall, I feel your writing was very enjoyable :) But a few things having to do with the situation in the story confused me and hardly seemed relatable to real ...

( NOTE TO READER!: I know this chapter may seem "long", but really it's only a few pages in real life. I enjoy creating full chapters so that my readers ...

I agree with the person above me. Stylistically it has it's own sort of beauty. I wouldn't worry about the eye. Artists themselves can be their toughest critics! I would ...

Wow! Love this! I really encourage you to continue to add to it. I'd like to keep reading to see what happens. My only critique really is you should've probably ...

This is the kind of poetry I enjoy reading. Simplistically beautiful. My favorite part was this section of the poem: Eternal life; thee immortal. Thy beating heart; crimson portal. Oh, ...

(NOTE to reader: I made a few tweaks to my poem, hopefully to help the flow of it seem a little more the way I had originally intended it to ...

I think what you have here is a good start of a chapter, but maybe not a real "chapter" yet. You could have continued to go on after the one ...

I have a few small critiques to this piece. First, I was slightly confused behind the mothers motives. Why was she panicking for her daughter so quickly when she was ...

This is a really beautiful sounding poem. Your personality seeps through like this very passionate person. I can very much tell why writing chose you! You have so much potential, ...

I really like that last closing statement for your chapter. It carried a lot of strength coming from your character. Your character Emilie sounds like a strong character period. It's ...