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Hello, Mabes. Here to lend a review for this. (: I'll start with the edits and comments in red. Bello Baque got lots of comments on his name. Often (,) ...

Hey, Elli! Welcome to YWS. I'm really glad you like the site so far. Yeah, It's pretty great. But I think you'll find that just about 99.9% of everyone likes ...

I noticed quite few little grammar things that could use fixing. I guess I'll just begin by pointing those out for you first. Then someone stood in front of me ...

Hey, Truth. These are all really beautiful. Your style is wonderful. The way you made the hands was very realistic in my opinion. My favorites would have to be the ...

I like the second I think. But it was a close call. ;) They're both cool. So that's just the design for the writing part? It's going to be attached ...

Rory | The Attack; Upper East Side I could hear cries for help among the gruesome fighting that was still busy taking place. I had to be quick to return ...

5/10. Is that a tshirt? 0_o

Hey there. Welcome to YWS, Chantelle. It's great to have you on the site. I'm positive you'll love it here. It's the best site for young writers. ;) And what ...

Hey there, Dreg. This was a pretty cool poem. Although, I have to say I didn't quite care for such over use of the word whore. Specifically here in the ...

In the crossed-line of melancholy, One sits and waits patiently (.) Period seems cleaner here. Smiling at chaos (,) Praying to loss. (This is a nice stanza) One feels clumsy ...

OMG, how cum i nvr msg'd u hello on here??? i nvr got 2 greet u hi lyke a newb!! welcum 2 yws. OMFreakingG, wut it do. i'm awsum at ...

Hey there, Mar. ^-^ I'd first like to say welcome to YWS. You're gonna really like it here. It's a great place for writers. And onto your short introduction. I ...

Vel. :) Thanks a lot for the review. I can see your points very clearly. I appreciate the kind words and understand your view. The point of the poem was ...

She is the girl with the rainbow smile, And as she lies, Inside she dies, And when she cries, She says bye-byes. (I think you should change this to "good-byes". ...

Poor ehte. Him and his vagrancy. This was a really nice poem. One thing though: It's a remnant of my weakness (;) eventually it all causes infliction. That just didn't ...