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I absolutly love reading your storys :D well done!

one word...beautiful! ^.^

ok thanks

Very...Very graphical. Description was good. Well written short story. I do agree with what dreamy and Crescent said about the reality of how the students acted. Was not that creative ...

thanks

The sound of a steady beat was upon the earth. Her feet kept a fast pace, her heart throbbing hard in her chest. Her long black braids blew in the ...

Hi, I will be critiqueing your paper today :D, Well i think your idea for this story is good and intresting. The story did get confusing at the end. I ...

I'm guessing you made this up? The shading is well done on this picture. Its got a nice proportion with head and neck. Im guessing the part that comes off ...

That was a LOT like twilight in the beginning of the story. I do agree with Crescent it does seem that it was a person like Jacob. Other than that ...

I think its a wonderful prologue I could definetly see this into fantastic story! Keep up the good work! PM me when you write more :D

You have a basic idea that a lot of people share or write. I thought its a good start but i would talk more about the characters and there personalitys. ...

:thud: wow great story.

Alright Crescent, I'm going to correct your work today on a couple of things that i think were either not worded properly or basically your people and plot. Well when ...

well, Crescent or should I say Phoebe.. When your writing a story your thoughts and ideas tend to change when your writing so, oviouslly it changed a bit.

thank you!