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thank you everyone!!

The Puppet’s Dance It was dark, and cold. I squinted my eyes hoping to find some sort of light in this abyss. The ground felt wooden or hollow as I ...

The Puppet’s Dance It was dark, and cold. I squinted my eyes hoping to find some sort of light in this abyss. The ground felt wooden or hollow as I ...

The Puppet’s Dance It was dark, and cold. I squinted my eyes hoping to find some sort of light in this abyss. The ground felt wooden or hollow as I ...

Hi. :} so i will be giving you a few tips on your writing. I see where you are trying to go with the prologue but of course we all ...

ok :) well here we go! First things first, i think it was good in a sense it gave information about it just so the reader knows where to start. ...

um.... Crescent i did. :| Maybe descibe how she was feeling, her fear.

thank you! a prologue sounds great to me!

Hi, Kuzco22 :D I will be critiquing your paper today. For starts in the beginning im going to point this out. Cherise replied as she stepped out the door. “Bye ...

*** I haven't truly finished my chapter i was just hoping what ya'll would think about the first part of it. :D Ch.1 The pounding rain fell over the busy ...

whatever Merlin i made a mistake -.-

I'm smiley, i'll be critiquing your paper. Well first things first, it was too short for me. You need to get more in depth about this if your planning on ...

thanks

Too twilight, Phobez!!!! D:

Hi Crescent, I will be critiquing your paper. First things first way too fast. You need to explain more of the history behind this. You wouldnt just throw you arms ...