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I really enjoyed reading your poem! It was like watching a movie. There were a few places that confused me though. I had to read some lines over to understand ...

Awww, that was really cute. It should be on a greeting card or postcard. I really liked it. Great job.

I really enjoyed reading this. It reminded me of a Paramore song. I loved the line "you will forever be haunting me ". The only thing I'd change about this ...

I found my ghost crying She held our diary She did not moan She did not whine She was small and quiet Her lips kissed the silence Our breaths danced ...

Oh, thanks for that! I was in a hurry. :)

Sundays at Tiffany’s by James Patterson 3 out of 5 stars Jane was eight years old when her imaginary friend, Michael, had to leave her. Michael promised that she wouldn’t ...

The way Emma Healy thought of her childhood and family changes. At the age of sixteen, she finds a birth certificate in the attic of her supposed twin brother. And ...

I really like it! In my mind, all of the roses seem too wonderful to be real. But that's what love feels like, so it works. :) In the 4th ...

I love it! You got their hair perfect. The colors are great. I really like the look in the girl's eyes and how she looks up to him. Her face ...

Great start! I love the character names. The first line is terrific! (I would change 'their' to 'its' just because grammar stuff.) I like the simple sentences. By removing some ...

I like it! It's very emotional and I can feel what you are writing. It's very interesting and packs a lot of things in there without being annoying. Don't let ...

I also just looked up "young writers" to find others who share my same passion. :)

I entered this into a short story contest (haven't heard the results yet). I still would like some criticism though so I can use it for something else if the ...

I like the poem! I love the similes you used but would like to see some different adjectives. It's very inspiring! I'm stuck between two things of what the poem ...

This is very good for a twelve-year-old! You are on your way to becoming a great writer. :) You have a few grammatical errors, as WonderingKate pointed out, but they're ...