Skellingtom

Thanks for the honest feedback. I wrote an extra mini paragraph to stick on the beginning, hopefully including all that you've talked about. The wooden door slowly creaked open in ...

You have a very dense style with the second paragraph, which is fine if that's what you want (it's not my style). While I find the second paragraph to be ...

I've been writing a fantasy novel for the past month. Recently I've had a read over the pen-and-paper draft, and I had a curious urge to regurgitate. So I am ...