Sincerity

Sharing “You are a noble, but not just any noble. Am I not correct?” She grilled him with her stare, but he had removed his hands from her shoulders and ...

Nice! That was really interesting and captivated my attention as soon as I started it. Very well written, and I couldn't spot anything that was confusing or in need of ...

Thanks! I'll try to fix some of that up, and I really appreciate the criticism... :)

An interesting story...I like your frank, direct approach to writing: It's quite refreshing! So far, the only thing I would critique would be how quickly the story progressed. You don't ...

Beginning Stretching and carefully unwinding herself, Alan took in her surroundings, which had been shrouded in darkness when she had stumbled off of her mount early in the morning. Now ...

Hmm, I like it! You seemed to struggle between different timings...There's a word for it, but I can't remember. Anyways, you go from speaking about the current time to the ...

Very nice! As the pieces are coming together, it's becoming more clear and grabbing. One bit of advice though: It would probably be easier to read if you simply added ...

Personally, I think that even in real life, one can learn a lot about a person just because of their name. I enjoy listening for names and looking at different ...

Missing Picking up her skirt and running up the stairs and out of the cool autumn air, Alana clutched the envelope that had just arrived. Her mind was racing as ...

Well this is certainly interesting! It grabbed my attention immediately, and I am quite intrigued...There isn't a whole lot to base a full opinion on, however, I would happily read ...

Thanks for the critiques and opinions! I'm intending to put up the next bit as soon as I can...Thanks again!

Hmm, this is quite intriguing! I love this style of writing, and you appear to do it very well. I hope that you'll continue it. :) Only a few critiques ...

This is my first story to post on here. Hope you like it, but please be critical. :) Thanks! Prologue: This has lasted long enough: It’s time for this war ...

[quote="halfdarainbow"]Hello,! My name is Kiana but you can call me Halfdarainbow,! I'm new here on YWS so yeah.. I think thats it but thats my intro,! Not very exciting but ...