SimplyPersnikety

Thank you very much for your comments. The jump in narrative was intentional but I might end up editing it and making it flow better. Thanks again for the comments! ...

Gone forever, Ripped from my life with one tear. Sleeping in heaven without a care. They left me behind, Broken and bleeding, Drifting in slumber on hospital sheeting. I reside ...

I like the subject but it's WAY to short. it feels like you just stopped right in the beginning of the poem. I'd really like to read more of it ...

Lovely! I love it! One of my favorite poems so far! I really like the ending. "You never have and you won't." FANTASTIC! It flows nicely and the length is ...

Okie Dokie, This is my first scribble of writing I've posted on YWS. (happy dance!) It's supposed to be a poem. :lol: Toodles! Aj~ Living Life Release your hold upon ...

Awesome! Very descriptive and suspenseful! I love it! I like the way mikhails mind works as well :D . Not a lot of mistakes, so kudos for that! The snake ...

Mmm... Lovely! Nice length and good use of words. The only problem would be you forgot to capitalize the W in whom but that's very miner. All in all a ...

Wonderful! Intoxicating! I couldn't stop reading! There were a few grammar and spelling issues but other then that... GREAT JOB!!

Hi everyone! I'm Abbie but I prefer you call me AJ. I write fiction, fantasy, children's stories and random poems. I like classical, epica, rock and Alternative music. I vanquish ...