Silverdragon150

Hi! I loved reading your poem, all the figurative language you used and the pictures it gives. I have to admit, I'm not very good with nitpicks, but I can ...

Prologue Chapter 1 Chapters 2+3 Chapter 4 Chapter 6 It's short, so if you have any ideas on how to lengthen it, go ahead and feel free to speak up. ...

I have to say, Drama, I'm usually not much of a romance person, but I saw this was by you and had to read it. I love it so far, ...

I finally reached this point. My jaw dropped at the end; that was a seriously fast turn of events, which is okay but I think I missed one thing. What ...

Prologue Chapter 1 Chapters 2+3 Chapter 5 ~Chapter 4~ Grace was the first up. She was watching the sunrise as others yawned around her. Jack came to sit beside her. ...

I finished reading this, and let me say, I wanted more, definitely. You have a very nice cliff hanger. I haven't read Twilight either, and I have that kind of ...

Yes, it does. Thank you a lot, GryphonFledgling. That really clears things up, and helps me feel better too. Thanks for your response, it answered my question.

I like the really eerie feeling the end gives the reader, but it does seem a bit like a prologue. But, I'm a newer writer, so feel free not to ...

I have to post on this one. I must say, I have found this true at many points in my life. I get stuck inside all the lies and sadness, ...

Prologue Chapter 1 Chapter 4 ~Chapter 2~ Hope rose, having gotten barely any sleep. She emerged from the hut-like structure she and Faith’s shared, dug out from the side of ...

Love this story. I like how you add this predicament to make things even more complicated. Fenrir does seem to be a bit sure of himself, a good setup for ...

Wow. I haven't seen that one recently: Two become allies with the treat to turn each other in. It's dynamic, original, and you've got the characters to pull it off. ...

First off, I just have to say this as a fan who has reached a good, exciting point in a book: Yes, yes! I knew it! I love how that ...

This chapter certainly is great for Plot development. I like they way it turned out, only making the situation more mysterious and forming possibilities in my mind. This chapter shows ...

I like this story overall, and I really want to see how it progresses. It has a good foundation, in my opinion, and a chance for some real character development. ...