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Re: The Master Mind: Chapter 1
I like this. It pulls at my imagination, and it makes me want to read more. You described the situation well and even put some of your own voice (or ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: Voiceless Chapter One (In progress)
Indian, I read this and I thought it followed up the prologue pretty well. Maybe you could use some longer words, but you're getting there. I like how you've skipped ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: The Elementals (Prologue)
I have read your revised prologue: I like it! That is the kind of thing that makes me want to read on. Simply the air of the dialogue adds so ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: The Legend of the White Dragon- Part 2
Woah. Smashing ending. Haha. I like how you've kept Andre's character shrouded in mystery. I also like how all of a sudden this guy she barely knows is in her ...
Jun 7, 2011 -
Re: Change and Survival: The Experiments' Story- Chapter 7
Prologue Chapter 1 Chapter 6 ~Chapter 7~ Hope finally emerged from her hut. Silver had announced that there would be a meeting in a few days, so it was assumed ...
Jun 7, 2011 -
Re: Change and Survival: The Experiments' Story- Chapter 6
Thanks! I updated it, fixing things you suggested. Tell me: does it read better now? I'll post the next chapter soon!
Jun 7, 2011 -
Re: Change and Survival: The Experiments' Story- Chapter 6
Prologue Chapter 1 Chapters 2+3 Chapter 4 Chapter 5 ~Chapter 6~ She woke with a start. She had had nightmares, terrible nightmares, about what the Scientists could do to Faith. ...
May 18, 2011 -
Re: the frozen heart and the wood
I had to finish the series. These are great poems. I especially like The Frozen Heart, and The Wood seems a good poem to sum it up. I love how ...
May 17, 2011 -
Re: The dream Hunter and The Hood
Hi Drama! I saw the first one, and decided I would read them all. I like the first one especially; it reminds me of a character I made, and has ...
May 17, 2011 -
Re: The Midnight Wolf
Hey Drama! I was reading your stuff, and I found this! I love it, a lot. I think you have good imagery, nice descriptions, and especially good phrasing. I can ...
May 17, 2011 -
Re: Your request makes me so happy!
I have a Sci-Fi story! Change and Survival I would enjoy it so much if you would review my story! This is just the prologue, but the links to the ...
May 16, 2011 -
Re: Hunted: Chapter One, Part One
Hi! I'm also a big fan of Warriors. I started reading your story, and so far, I like it. You could add a little more description, like describing the forest ...
May 16, 2011 -
Re: Answer a question with a question game
Is 'where' a place, or an idea?
May 12, 2011 -
Re: The Silver Dragon (1)
I read your story, seeing it was about a dragon. I love it, to put my feelings simply. I like the plot so far, I like Lidia's character, and I ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: If You Fell...
Right off, I like how you have used the imagery. Of what I was expecting of the first line, it wasn't what I got. I like it, it seems to ...
May 11, 2011