Shiny

no no you're not harsh at all. i really need criticism on my work :D lol. you're right because to be honest i never really spent enough time thinking about ...

its great that you could connect with the poem that way :D

i'm glad you enjoyed it lol. :D still you're right i need to work on my structure !

thanks, i really like your view. you are so right i think the problem with my poems is that they are too abstract and seem more like a stream of ...