Shinrai

the end was better than the first part but I still enjoyed it it was short and sweet and i really liked this bit "A testament to its role It ...

Lies on lies ... it was made to be repetive ... i used the red just so i could show that the first and last lines were made to be ...

This was made to be repeat itself and I used the red to show that the first and the last lines were made to be different that whats in between ...

I liked this but my favorite part had to be the end "Doing what the Sky can't. Using her, To bring light To the world." that was just brilliant not ...

As I began this I'm gunna be honest I didn't think I would like this but the ending was what made it really good when you said "Cheers to the ...

I think you could improve your intro a little I'm sure you could come up with some good descriptive words and analogies that would suit you I don't really want ...

Thanks Daisuki! I'm glad you liked it so much

Wow I really liked this the flow of it kept me reading and wanting more this was so good You sit and laugh, As I hit the floor, My world ...

:) I'm not going to nitpick about anything I'm not the one to ask for that kind of stuff but i still really liked this wish you had written more ...

"I thought that some of the lines didn;t flow as well as they could, and you spelled or wrong. (ore)" - cityofdragons Thank you :) i use Google Chrome which ...

This video was amazing I've had a YouTube account and only have about 20 videos favorited but this one makes it onto that list I don't know how I missed ...

Ah love! What a mysterious thing, where we take every action, what ever it means and twist it to what our heart desires, what a curious thing is love's fire ...