Sherri

I think I see what you mean; I shouldn't start each stretch of dialogue with quotations, and should try to vary it? Thanks for commenting, by the way :)

I think you can put something like this "*" or this "~" between stanzas to separate them. I'm not sure if it works, but I think it does. It might ...

Thanks for the review! I'll work on fixing up those mistakes! :) I'll also review my dialogue better in both this chapter and in future chapters. As for the boy... ...

Thank you so much for both the review and questions; I enjoyed getting feedback and being able to improve my story by reading it. I agree, the opening of a ...

Thanks so much :D Okay, so first of all, I can't believe I missed that typo! That would have made me laugh too... I'll also fix up that semicolon mistake. ...

I don't mean to be so active... This website is just so fun, I can't help it! :D As for my missing details, I see what you're talking about. I'll ...

I'll have to fix those mistakes... I honestly didn't even notice I was doing that with the dialogue; I need to pay more attention to that! Thanks :) As for ...