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You have expanded this excellently. I don't think I have anything else to say! Great work!

Edited for clarity and general usefulness after I got over the initial sting of your review =) It really is useful and right on the beam (hence the sting!) Overwriting ...

Just clarifying a few things and then I'll be on my way =) I agree on both counts with your assessment of your characters, and only mean to add that ...

Just a quicky- I know what Special Education is. My mother is a Special Education teacher for the middle school in our area. I meant that the MC is getting ...

Snoink Thanks! Sheep don't attack much, but my sheep always lead with their heads =P I don't know that I've ever been kicked by a sheep! Unfortunately for those who ...

Thanks, all! Kylan Certainly your interpretation wasn't strictly literal, but you are bound by your perception of the sheep as a docile thing. The point here is that the sheep ...

LastPaladin Thanks! Looking back more carefully at this poem, I can see that using "mine" did not prove to be an enhancement of the tone (which I'd hoped it would ...

*coco: You're right, no storyline yet! I debated this, but I want it to be simple for readers to get a handle on my characters before I launch right into ...

Yep, I think that would probably be helpful. Barring that (if you add it and suddenly remember why you deleted it!) I think just one or two words indicating that ...

Thanks for reviewing, everyone!!! AAAM (I think I have too many A's in there. Oh well.): Yea the "anyways" was intentional. I really have a fairly good grasp of the ...

Haha that was the cool part about it. It had the address painted on it and everything! I still have it on a shelf in my room =)

Oh yay! A review! =) I think I understand what you are saying. I did write it rather fast, and I can see where parts of it would be easy ...

Ah, I was going to recommend the Dresden Files as well. Additionally, you might try The Sonambulist. Great read, and very surreal (a little Gaiman-ish without being too similar).

Okay, so this is definitely much better following a little tweaking. One thing that I have been mulling over is that I don't feel very invested in the characters. I ...

Actually, I disagree with the generalization that your endings are rushed. It was only this particular piece that I felt at a loss as to what happened, exactly. I just ...