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I'm going to go through this grammatically first, with overall critique afterwards. =) Megan crawled through the yard hedge rapidly, her father ' s Swiss army knife in her mouth, ...

KAH, you have such a pretty smile!!!

The only thing here in your preliminary idea that makes me a little wary is the fact that the hippies and benders each have their own kryptonite, and that these ...

So I came in here with rules to announce and questions to ask! Only it seems that certain other people have beaten me to the punch. Welcome to YWS. =) ...

6. But only because I can't see what it is!

Critiquing this bit-by-bit... Gavin’s eyes filled with water as a lonely tear drop ran down his freckled face. This image is terribly cliched, I think. The idea of a single ...

Edited for clarity and general usefulness after I got over the initial sting of your review =) It really is useful and right on the beam (hence the sting!) Overwriting ...

Two quick things before continuing with this review.... Firstly, don't switch to using "I" unless you are going to use it through the whole piece. You probably did this inadvertantly, ...

This isn't a bad poem by any means, but I think it struck me as being especially muddy. "Youth crime" is such a far-reaching topic, and this poem doesn't seem ...

Okay, so you can read this separately if you don't feel like going through and reading the rest of my "novel." Or if you like it you can read the ...

Just clarifying a few things and then I'll be on my way =) I agree on both counts with your assessment of your characters, and only mean to add that ...

I really liked this, and I've come back and read it twice now. I hesitated to review because I couldn't quite put my finger on what about this was disconcerting. ...

Ooh. I liked this, and then never reviewed it. I don't usually advocate for the use of "you" when writing. Too often, it's confusing and creates a crack in the ...

Argh! Lined paper! -cringes- Um, anyway.... I'm going to go ahead and assume here that you weren't going for realistic and leave the anatomical corrections out of my critique. If ...

This is an interesting piece, and I do think it's a good read, but a difficult one. I don't think your vocabulary is too advanced, or that your sentence structure ...