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Nah, cracked ribs are in and out usually, unless doctors suspect he has internal injuries. If that's the case, they might keep him overnight, moniter his blood pressure, the whole ...

What a cool story! I really like this! There were a few things that bothered me (I'm not talking grammar, of course!) At the very beginning, it seems very disjointed, ...

Anyone else? =) These were both great reads!

Okay, so if you haven't read the prologue yet, you can. It's up to you, really, because everything from there doesn't come into play until quite a while later. Here ...

This is interesting. I think you should definitely develop it a little more--right now it seems to move very quickly and a lot of the potential description has been lost. ...

These are very creative, and you have a very clean style. I'm going to critique these pretty thoroughly, but understand that it's not because they are bad, only that I ...

This is very good! To return it to him Without life. This line, I think, is a little confusing. Because the poem itself (thus far) has been so linear, it's ...

Yep, I think that would probably be helpful. Barring that (if you add it and suddenly remember why you deleted it!) I think just one or two words indicating that ...

My Sister's Keeper--sadder than you can imagine, but a great movie, nonetheless. Ah! This movie made me miserable for days! I can't handle the sad stuff.

Laika I shut my jaws over a laugh, turning it into a yip. That was Grace--back to her lovable, dramatic self so close to her brush with death. I rose ...

I like the word skipping--I think it lends the story a clipped, guarded air which would otherwise be missing. I really do like this story. It's very well put together, ...

Laika I wasn't sure how much I liked Jake's sudden closeness to the Thumb girl. But she seemed alright. It was the male I was concerned about. One thing I ...

This is a great poem! The only thing that bothered me (and I'm no poet, so feel free to take my advice with a grain of salt or sand or ...

Oh no! I thought this was going to be something about a child, and I came in all prepared to steel myself. And then it was about a pet! I ...

Laika I trailed behind, laughing softly to myself as Rook, hardly encumbered by the sleeping Aliri, nipped at the male Thumb. I didn't like his body language--he was slinking, anxious. ...