Shepherd

In my writing, I tend to use swearing only if the situation warrants it, or if it allows me to make a point about a character that would be difficult ...

The world churns under slick rain Sabotages booted feet Twists away A deep, angular breath turned sideways Rakes at your lungs Raw with terror Claws of earth and flesh tremble ...

I'm going to review this piece-by-piece, but I'll leave the grammar and such to you once you start working on a final draft of this! Sandar Ortano leaned across a ...

I love camping! Anyway. I think you have limited yourself a great deal by using "you" as a subject. Because you don't have a defined subject, and must refer to ...

I'm not a huge fan of this poem. Overall, I found the imagery to be redundant and not overly surprising. The idea of using flowers as a metaphorical construct is ...

Ahhhh lined paper! Anyway. One thing that I noticed right off the bat with your first drawing is that you have a very common misconception about the chin. Check out ...

Not always epilepsy, but I have treated maybe a dozen people with seizures (preliminary treatment of course). 1: What is it like to have a seizure? I'm going to assume ...

You know, I couldn't quite get into this poem. I didn't think it was badly written, and I think that your word choice and overall temperment during this piece is ...

3) Let's start here by writing down what we have. A = .2 x = .14 It doesn't seem like enough, right? So let's think about what we know about ...

2) Hm. Do you draw force diagrams when you work these? I think you might find them to be extremely helpful when solving this type of problem, because holding all ...

I'm going to solve these conceptually if you don't mind. For most of these, there is more than one way to go about solving them, so if you'd rather see ...

Yep, this is a cool little poem. I liked your cadence at the beginning a lot more than what you have at the end, although I think the measure is ...

This is definitely a neat little poem. There are, however, a couple of things that I think you could change to improve this overall. I'm not sure if you are ...

Okay, so you can see that this will need a little work. I think this is probably a rough draft, rather than something that you have really polished, so I'm ...

Thanks! The quality of this second scan is not as good, and to be honest I'm not as happy with this drawing overall. With pups especially (as this guy is), ...