Shearwater

Hey, red! Awesome origami! I used to love doing origami back when I was kid. (Like it was sooo long ago) However, the most complicated thing I could make was ...

Hey, there! =] So I actually enjoyed reading this. The story was quite wonderful and I liked you characters and the steady flow you had throughout this piece. However there ...

Hey there! I liked this poem, it was quite different and made me think. I thought I had a brief understanding of what you were trying to say but the ...

Hey there Monogo! Pink here, dropping by for a short review. Right now you're scaring away people with you info dump in the very beginning of your topic. You shouldn't ...

Hey, there! Pink here, dropping by for a short review. So I like the meaning of this poem, it's quite sad and it's not totally over done to the point ...

Hey there! Pink here, dropping by for a short review. It seems like you totally leap into your story here without really giving us some background information or anything. We ...

Hey there! Wow, this was a pretty short prologue. You might want to try lengthening this and giving us some more information regarding what you're trying to say or what ...

Hi there, Pink here! I'm here to do a short review for you. First of all, you might want to check out the dialogue. Make sure you insert a new ...

Hi, Bubble! Here to review. Your story's opening is a little weird. It's not that bad but it could be slightly more pulling than what you have. You kind of ...

So this chapter was good. In fact, all your chapters are pretty good and they're easy to follow and read but things to be going at a slow pace right ...

Okay, back for more. This chapter seemed a bit more telly than the others. You kind of brushed your way through the beginning and it didn't give off the same ...

Hey! It's Pink! Sorry, I told you I was going to review this a while ago and I seemed to have forgotten about it but I decided that I'd sit ...

Hey, Elite. Welcome to YWS! So what you have here is pretty good. I like it. However there were a few cases in which you were quite 'telly' about the ...

Hey, Gomer! This is actually quite an interesting piece you have here. I like how you've put this in the romantic section and you're referring to a city, a place ...

Hi, Story! Here to review! I think your opener needs some more work. You did a lot of describing and didn't exactly go into a pull. You want to make ...