ShaydeDesiree

Chapter 1 My name is Awenasa. It means “my home” in the language of the white man. Because it is not a “proper” name, they call me Sadie. The white ...

[quote="XavierJohnson123"] Her bosom excited and agitated by the caresses of your hand. [/quote] I loved this qoute. It explains it so well. I am only 15, but I know what ...

If you could help me come up with a title that would be great!! *********************************************************************************** It was December. It was beginning to get cold. We ha

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I wrote a similar poem, and I have to say I know how you feel. But I didnt really like the ending. It was too much "in your face" and ...

I dont want to be rude, but I didnt like it. It just wasnt as good as some of your other writing. There are some spelling mistakes that I noticed. ...

I know it doesnt flow very well, it isnt meant to. But I would love you to critique any other aspect of this poem! Thanks!! **************************************** “One cut” you said, ...

I loved this poem. The deeper meaning behind it made it even better. my favorite lines have to be; "I've been taken advantage of, I've been hurt and scorned. I ...

"But if forever was a day, I don't want to love you that way." I think this is the best quote throughout the piece. But i did love the full ...

I loved it...its hilarious. thank you for making me laugh! i needed it.

The day started normal Just like any other day The rain fell without a breath But the tree fell anyway We lost power but it was alright We got a ...

Dramma pointed out the mistakes for me. :) But i loved it, it is spontaneous, and fun. It put a smile on my face and that was what it was ...

This poem captures the jist of depression, but if you want it to really touch someone, I would add a lot more. there are a few spelling errors, such as ...

This was an excellent piece for written so late at night. it made my cry! it was a shock when she said "Mom's dead". It brought back memories of when ...

This is beautifully written. I lost my father two years ago but it was kind of instant. but this still brings tears to my eyes. Its so raw and true. ...