Shaken

Writing comes easiest when we are writing what we know. What we feel, dream of, believe in, are hurt by - all emotions strongest and most alive in us comes ...

The style of this poem really catches your attention - it's not the kind you can simply skim over and grasp the general idea, you make the reader work hard ...

The flow was difficult to catch every once in a while, and the emphasis you put on certain words stood more as blockers than open doors to a good flow, ...

So that’s a yes indefinitely A heartbeat, make it one, two and three You closed tired eyes And open them to my own uncertainty Is it alright if I scream ...

The language of this peice is absolutely captivating, it only needs structure and preferably more length and it would be beautiful. Your imagery is perfect and you have a way ...

Loved this peice, you've captured the innocence and perfection of first love - or at least that's the idea you appeared to be trying to put across - how consuming, ...

Very strong emotion coming out in this piece. I can almost see tears, feel the loneliness, touch the rage behind your words. And your structure separates the feelings well. You ...

Your imagery was beautiful, poems that aren't quite straightforward have to have captivating language to draw the reader in and I thought you did a good job of that - ...

Short but very expressive, I like the comparisons you used to highlight the seriouness of your struggle. I also like how you captured the feeling of two different views: the ...

I love the silence forsaking All but a heart so honestly breaking And I would give anything To replace the empty you’re endlessly taking Just for a very little while ...